See, this is the part that always gets me. I can get the initial idea out and onto paper… and then I run into a brick wall trying to polish it. Either it comes out right the first time, or it doesn’t. 😛
Anywho, I’m not allowed to just give up this time, so onwards!
Okay, lots of comments that the story was hard to follow, so time to pull it apart and see what information needs to be passed to the reader:
Main Goal: Close the Dark Gate before it eats the world.
Main Opposition: Time. 100 people died to open the gate, the number of lives required to close it grows with each passing moment.
So we have the protag waffling at the last moment because promising to die to save the world is a lot easier to say than to do.
In theory, everything else is gravy.
But it’s such yummy yummy gravy! *sighs* Backstory on why and who opened the Gate, backstory on who, why, and how the Good Guys are trying to close the gate, backstory on the protag and the protag that just got eaten are often requested but I’m not sure how much to fit in.
500 words is the goal, more or less, and I’d like to keep the backstory from consuming the piece. *ponders*
I think I need to look at this from a drabble format, pulling it apart into sections and working on those. Fitting as much information into the words as I can without turning it into a befuddled mess. Which it apparently already is. Hmmm. *ponders*